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Tampa English Tutor Finds Good Post on Punctuating Bulleted Lists

Posted on 22nd February 2012 in Tampa Writing Tutor

Check out Lynn’s post about properly punctuating bulleted lists.

She includes a great run down of the ways that The  Chicago Manual of Style, Gregg’s Reference Manual and Garner’s Modern American Usage differ in the punctuation guidance they give.

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This bulleted list isn't quite parallel and leaves a bad taste in my mouth. Image by Ben Ostrosky and licensed under cc by 2.0. Visit's Ben's blog at http://sylvar.livejournal.com/

My pet peeve is bulleted lists that don’t follow the rules of parallel structure.

Eric Anderson is an English and history tutor in Wesley Chapel, Florida.

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Tampa SAT Writing Tutor Student Scores 150 Point Gain

Posted on 1st November 2011 in Tampa Writing Tutor

News keeps trickling in from students who took the October SAT. I heard this week from a happy parent of a scholarship athlete who may be headed to an Ivy League school. He needed to raise his SAT writing score and did a super SAT Writing cram session with me.

We reviewed all of the major grammar rules tested on the SAT in one marathon session.  At any rate, our work together and the practice tests he took helped him make a 150-point increase! He already had a decent score, so getting to an elite level really took some doing.

Way to go, JV!

 

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Business English Class Offers Proofreading Tips

Posted on 25th August 2011 in Tampa Writing Tutor

I started teaching a short course in business English a few weeks ago. This week, the members of the class discussed tactics they use to proofread business letters.

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This image by Cortney Carmody. Catch more of her images in her Flickr photostream at http://www.flickr.com/photos/41185766@N03/ . Image licensed under CC by 2.0They came up with a good list:

  • Read the letter backwards – Start with the final sentence and read each sentence. The student that contributed this tip said that reading “backwards” lets him look at the words without getting caught up in the letter’s content.
  • Read the letter out loud – Let the ear catch what the eye misses.
  • Read the letter with an awareness of the sins of its creator -  Look carefully for the kinds of errors that are typical of the person who wrote the letter.
  • Print the letter and proof a hard copy – Errors are easier to see on paper than on screen.
  • Let some time pass between writing and proofing – Let a final draft sit for a while before proofing it. Come at it with fresh eyes.
  • Find the office English major – Let another person give the letter a look before it goes in the mail.

If you have a good technique that you use to proofread, I would love to add it to our list.

This post written by Tampa English tutor Eric Anderson. Eric tutors grammar and writing. Contact him at 813.787.8959 or using the magic of e-mail at Tampa tutor (at) Tampabay.rr.com.

 

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Tampa SAT Writing Tutor: Dangling Participles

Posted on 27th May 2011 in Tampa SAT Preparation, Tampa Writing Tutor

Tampa SAT Writing Tutor Hints: Dangling Participles

To do well on the writing section of the SAT, you need to understand dangling participles.

Dangling participle sounds like a painful medical condition, but it’s really an easily corrected writing error.

A participle is a word made from a verb and used as an adjective.

Because participles are made from verbs, they look like verbs and have verb endings (–ed,-en,-t,-ing).  However, participles modify nouns and pronouns because they’re really adjectives.

If that explanation is clear as mud, maybe a few examples will help make it clearer.

I watched the laughing hyenas. (What kind of hyenas? Laughing is a participle that functions as an adjective.)

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The collapsed mineshaft was dangerous. (What kind of mineshaft? Collapsed is a participle that functions as an adjective describing bridge.)

The stolen motorcycle was recovered by detectives. (What kind of motorcycle? Stolen is a participle that functions as an adjective describing the motorcycle.)

He ate the burnt hash browns covered in ketchup. (What kind of hash browns? Burnt is a participle that describes the noun hash browns.)

Like adjectives, participles are usually found in front of the nouns they modify. Sometimes, though, a participle can be found after the noun it modifies.

The children smelled the cookies baking. (Which cookies? The cookies baking. In this sentence, baking is a participle that functions as an adjective modifying cookies.)

HOW TO FIX DANGLING PARTICIPLES

A participle dangles if it can’t logically modify the noun closest to it.

I saw the house peeking through the trees.

The participle phrase peaking through the trees attaches itself to the nearest noun, house. Because the house can’t possibly peek through the trees, the participle dangles.

This dangling participle can be corrected easily.

Peeking through the trees, I saw the house.

Let’s try another.

Rushing to catch the train, Bo’s wallet fell out of his shirt.

What does the participle Rushing to catch the train modify? Not Bo’s wallet, right? It modifies Bo.

Rushing to catch the train, Bo lost his wallet when it fell from his shirt pocket.

Now Bo, not his wallet, is rushing to catch the train.

Notice that when the sentence starts with a participle phrase, the participle phrase is followed by a comma. After the comma comes the noun or pronoun that does the action described in the participle phrase.

Dangling Participle SAT Writing Question

On the writing part of the SAT, you might see a sentence correction question like this one:

Racing to the airport, Jane’s desire was not to miss her flight to the Galapagos Islands

a) Racing for the airport, Jane’s desire was not to miss her flight to the Galapagos Islands.

b) The airport being raced for, Jane was not desiring to miss her flight to the Galapagos Islands.

c) Racing to the airport, so Jane would not miss her flight to the Galapagos Islands.

d) Racing to the airport, Jane had no intention of missing her flight to the Galapagos Islands.

e) Being that she raced to the airport, Jane’s desire did not intend to miss her flight to the Galapagos Islands.

The original sentence has a dangling participle because Jane’s desire can’t race to the airport. Only Jane can race to the airport. So the only possible correct answers to this question will have Jane immediately after the comma that follows the participle Racing to the airport.

Only choices b and d correct the dangler, and d is the better of the two.

I help students improve their scores on the reading and writing portions of the SAT. If you or a student in your family needs help, please call me.  I’m Tampa SAT tutor Eric Anderson and can be reached at 813.787.8959.

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Tampa Writing Tutor: What is an em Dash?

Posted on 19th May 2011 in Tampa Writing Tutor

Rappers know what an Eminem dash is.

Fat kids know what an M&M dash is.

But, what, in God’s green Earth, is an em dash?

An em dash is a dash that is the width of an m.

In informal writing, em dashes may replace commas, semicolons, colons, and parentheses to indicate added emphasis, an interruption, or an abrupt change of thought. Use an em dash sparingly in formal writing, or you’ll seem as breathless as a pre-teen girl backstage at a Justin Beeber concert.

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Similar to an extended hyphen (-), an em dash is used to show a break in thought or a shift of tone.  It provides more emphasis than a comma, colon, or semicolon.

And it’s way more fun at a party.

Em Dash Examples

1.  I wash the clothes—you wash the car.

2.  Judge Judy, I paid the bills—all of the bills—during the time we were together.

3. The car—a red Porsche Boxster—was double parked for an hour before the police came and towed it. away.

How to Make the Em Dash

Tell it that the N is after it.

Make the em dash in MS Word by holding down the “Ctrl” and “Alt” keys while you push the minus sign (—) on the number pad. The minus sign is in the upper right-hand corner of the number pad.

Incorrect Use of the Em Dash

Review your notes and read Chapters 4—5 for Wednesday’s final.

The em dash should not be used to denote a range of value when referring to dates, times, or numbers. Use the sleeker, sexier en dash instead. The en dash is the width of an n.

 

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